Self-Assessment Essays - Education, Writing, Rhetoric, Essay

Self-Assessment : Read / skim the models, and compare the new essay with them. Which of the models is closer to in terms of content and quality of thought, and being organized and understandable? Take synthesis into consideration. The second model (scored a 6) is close in terms of content and quality of thought to my essay. Both essays answered the prompt similarly: advertisements benefit consumers by keeping them informed and showing them what products are out there. Both essays were organized similarly with five paragraphs. Also, at least three sources were synthesized and connected back to the thesis statement. However, I found that my essay was less clear and more succinct than the sample essay; I did not elaborate on all pieces of evidence. Therefore, I would've received a lower grade (4 or 5). About your own essay, what is ONE feature you could improve in the next one that you write? The next time I write the essay, I believe that I would need to spend more time elaborating on evidence and providing a summary of the body in the conclusion. At some points, I did not provide clear, coherent explanations for why certain pieces of evidence connected back to the thesis. I believe these errors are due to time constraints. I only had 30 minutes to write the essay (took too long to analyze sources). Score : 5 Develops a position on the effects of advertising At least three sources are synthesized Argument is generally clear and the sources generally support the author's position: However, the links between the sources and the argument are somewhat strained. Is less developed and cogent than essays earning higher scores Assessment of Peer Essays : Tiki Brown: Score 4-5: Develops a position on the effects of advertising. Attempts to present an argument and support the position by synthesizing at least two sources (synthesizes three sources), but ends up oversimplifying the main argument and sources used. Link between argument and sources is somewhat weak Allah Akbar Duncan Scott : Score 4-5 : Develops a position on the effects of advertising Attempts to present argument; however, it is oversimplified and in some places, misunderstood Link between argument and sources are strong; however, sources are not elaborated upon fully Essay does not seem to be very sophisticated (Peer scores should be up to score 5; however elaboration was missing)